On February 13, 2015, I wrote a blog post titled Chocolate Chips: A Valentine Song. The chocolate chip song was a bit of a cheesy take on Journey’s Open Arms. It was a passable post, I suppose, but not the best writing I’ve ever done.
Thirteen months later, a small group of bloggers were
challenged gently encouraged by Dan at No Facilities to rewrite a former post…an offering we had published in the past that screamed do-overs! or a story that beckoned to have a new plot twist.
I immediately scoured past posts and came up with the selection noted above. The next question was what to do with it. How can I make it, at the very least, marginally better? Well, not too long ago, I wrote a piece called A Blogger’s Soliloquy, in which I mashed up Act 3, Scene 1 of Hamlet. Since then, I’ve been inspired by Shakespeare and Data to write a sonnet in iambic pentameter, with the proper subject matter or, in this case, food for thought. I hope you enjoy this reformed song.
I have but one desire, tis plain and clear
Of a darkish substance that summons me
Its sweetness, its smoothness brings my tongue near
To taste what the Mokaya gave to me
I speak the name borne of the cocoa plant
The name for which millions adore and lust
Chocolate! chocolate! I daily rant
Give me your cake and chips and mousse, you must
For to be without chocolate is hell
No man, woman, child shall ever endure
A burn in the soul that Tums cannot quell
Chocolate is love to the senses sure
Forever I shall taste dark dulcitude
With its creamy, come-get-me attitude
Feel free to share your comments regarding the original piece vs. the rewrite.
Which one did you like better? Did I meet the mark of a sonnet? Are you craving dark chocolate?
(Check back later for links to the group’s rewrites as they are posted.)